BCM 241

Peer Feedback – Week 11

By reading another’s Beta presentation and giving feedback to my peer, I hoped to help them improve next time. I also gained new ideas for inclusions to augment my own work.  

Using Richard Liu’s Beta as an example, (his blog is posted as a link below), we both used ‘WordPress’ to create our blogs, but his work looks unique and thus more interesting, as he changed the blog’s background colour to purple with white print to make his post stand out. This different colour combination or something like it, is something I would consider for my future blog, as it attracts the audience’s attention, but is also easy to read.

He used intext links, (coloured pink to make them stand out from the general text), which if the audience chose to access these, helps them access the resources used in the creation of his work. Thus, they can read and understand more about his subject matter. This is a great idea and something that I will consider using in my future work.

By giving feedback to my peer, I learned that it is important to have good audio-visual presentation skills, especially clear, understandable and expressive speech. The voice must communicate interest to the audience and through its pitch and tone, engage the listener in the subject matter. This is especially so when there are long spoken passages with the same background image on the screen and fewer dot points.

It is also important when we present our work to have attention-grabbing images and enough subheadings and point form to incorporate with the voice-over. As I mentioned in my Beta, most of us, (Gen Zers), are visual learners, so we need images to help us focus on the topic. This will help the audience understand and retain the information better. 

Finally, it is necessary to follow the assessment criteria if you are to produce work of a reasonable to sophisticated standard. It is necessary to include the required content, in the appropriate format, so that the tutor/marker can discern your understanding of the subject matter and that you are meeting the requisite standards.  

I try to cover all the points in the assessment criteria, to learn as much as possible, and to improve my work and grade. Receiving peer and tutor feedback is beneficial. Comments from others’ perspectives, can give valuable suggestions for improvements to increase your future research and learning capacity and thus enhance the document’s quality. 

Here is Richard’s Beta blog post:

3 thoughts on “BCM 241

  1. Hey really liked the idea of your digital artefact. I think you have done a great job in being vey clear in your timeline of production for this digital artefact. You didn’t include much in your plan on how you plan on completing the ethnographic part of your digital artefact. Would suggest to be more clear on that moving forward, I do like how you included a lot of links regarding the topic. Overall I’m very excited to see the future of this DA.


  2. Hey Adrian, The concept of cooking to bring people together is brilliant and definitely needed during these times. The video you have created provides a great overview of Cooking on the bright side and the need for it. When looking over the blog I have a couple of things that you might want to incorporate as you go along these include:

    Linking to the statistics you have used in your blog post. This allows people to visit the post and get an updated message keeping the post relevant and useful for individuals looking.

    Next is linking to your media niche and Feild site post in order to show the scope of your ethnographical research.

    On the topic of ethnographical research, you haven’t particularly referenced how this fits into your ethnographical research, such as the frameworks you are using and how you will be interacting with your media niche in relation to ethnography. This could be a key thing you can add in the following posts you are making.

    I have also done some exploring into your topic and I believe you could benefit from exploring this blog post that covers many recipes and Instagram accounts related to your topic. here


    Overall I am excited to see the progression of cooking on the Brightside. All the best with it and I will be watching regularly to see what you come up with.


  3. Hi Adrian, I thoroughly enjoyed watching your beta presentation and learning about what you have done so far. Changing your digital artefact mid way through the semester can be a scary thing to do but I think you have made a good decision as I could hear the enthusiasm when you were talking about your new DA about e waste. I enjoyed how you described your ideal target demographic in detail as knowing who exactly your target audience allows you to conduct clear and precise auto-ethnographic research on your niche. I found that you incorporated your peer comment as well as your understanding of the lecture materials effectively as you gave a couple of examples of how your peer comments and lecture material made you think about what you could do to improve DA. The use of hashtags in your Instagram page is great as well as it is allowing your niche to view your content.

    However, I did find reading through your blog post having watched your presentation that it was a bit repetitive as you had already mentioned the ‘6 Steps to Build a Good DA’ in your presentation. I think perhaps you could have mentioned some different readings from the lecture material possibly including how you incorporated some analytical framework techniques as this would have improved the professionalism of your post. Although you gave a brief explanation of the types of content you have been posting I feel as though you need to define your persona a bit clearer. One other thing I would add to your blog post would be tags as they can invite a larger audience to view your content which can ultimately lead to more engagement on your Instagram page. Overall I really enjoyed watching your presentation. Good luck with the rest of the digital artefact!


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